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chapters/book2/ch05-final.md

@@ -8,13 +8,13 @@ Mere was at the kitchen table, hair up, herbalism notes spread in a semicircle a
 
 "You pulled back last night," she said.
 
-I hadn't expected the observation, which meant I should have. Mere noticed behavioral shifts the way other people noticed weather — factually, without drama, because the data was simply there and not commenting on it would be more unusual than commenting on it.
+I hadn't expected the observation, which meant I should have. Mere noticed behavioral shifts the way other people noticed weather — factually, without drama.
 
 "I was processing the case," I said.
 
-"You were processing the case before I said anything about Leon. You kept processing the case after. The shift happened during." She looked up from her notes. Not angry. Not hurt. Baffled, in the specific way that Mere was baffled — the expression of a woman encountering data that contradicted her model. "You adjusted your posture. You adjusted your plan for Leon. You adjusted the amount of information you were sharing with me about the crystal." She paused. "Why?"
+"You were processing the case before I said anything about Leon. You kept processing the case after. The shift happened during." She looked up from her notes. Not angry. Not hurt. Baffled — the expression of a woman encountering data that contradicted her model. "You adjusted your posture. You adjusted your plan for Leon. You adjusted the amount of information you were sharing with me about the crystal." She paused. "Why?"
 
-(*Because you said \u2018careful\u2019 isn\u2019t in his vocabulary and I heard \u2018you should have known that\u2019 and I heard \u2018you trusted competence over judgment\u2019 and I heard \u2018you let Leon run unsupervised because it was easier than doing the work yourself\u2019 — all of which was a reasonable interpretation of a sentence that, I was beginning to suspect, contained none of those things —*)
+(*Because you said 'careful' isn't in his vocabulary and I heard 'you should have known that' and 'you trusted competence over judgment' and 'you let Leon run unsupervised because it was easier than doing the work yourself' — a reasonable interpretation of a sentence that, I was beginning to suspect, contained none of those things —*)
 
 "I thought you were criticising my decision to let Leon handle Galden alone."
 
@@ -22,11 +22,9 @@ I hadn't expected the observation, which meant I should have. Mere noticed behav
 
 "I know."
 
-"That's what I meant. I said what I meant." The bafflement was genuine — her forehead creased in a way that meant she was running the conversation backward through her own memory, looking for the sentence that could have generated the interpretation I'd given it, and not finding one. "Why would I criticise you for delegating? You don't have time to run every thread yourself. That's not criticism. That's arithmetic."
+"That's what I meant. I said what I meant." The bafflement was genuine. "Why would I criticise you for delegating? You don't have time to run every thread yourself. That's not criticism. That's arithmetic."
 
-She meant it. All of it. Exactly what she'd said, nothing more, nothing less. The words were the complete message.
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-(*File this. File it permanently. The noise reads subtext because subtext is how most people communicate — they say one thing and mean another and the gap between the two is where the real information lives. Mere doesn't have a gap. There is no gap. The signal is the signal. Stop reading between lines that don't exist.*)
+(*File this. The noise reads subtext because subtext is how most people communicate — the gap between what they say and what they mean is where the real information lives. Mere doesn't have a gap. The signal is the signal. Stop reading between lines that don't exist.*)
 
 "I heard something you didn't say," I said. The admission cost something, though I couldn't have told you what currency.