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@@ -14,13 +14,13 @@ He turned it in his fingers the way he turned everything — with the unconsciou
 
 Nothing.
 
-His face went blank. Not the disciplined blankness of a man controlling his reaction — the absolute absence of expression that happens when every available cognitive resource redirects to a single channel. A craftsman's version of hyperfocus. His hands knew what they were holding before his brain finished the assessment.
+His face went blank. Not the disciplined blankness of a man controlling his reaction — the absolute absence of expression of every cognitive resource redirecting to a single channel. A craftsman's version of hyperfocus. His hands knew what they were holding before his brain finished the assessment.
 
 "Where," he said.
 
 "The mine. Velken's Drift. Old ore carts in the lower galleries. It's been sitting in saturated residue since the mine closed."
 
-Carter set the piece down with the reverent care of a man placing something he understood to be irreplaceable. Picked up the second piece. Turned it. Set it down. Third. Fourth. Each examination shorter than the last — his assessment framework had calibrated on the first piece and was now confirming the pattern.
+Carter set the piece down with the reverent care of a man placing something he understood to be irreplaceable. Picked up the second piece. Turned it. Set it down. Third. Fourth. Each examination shorter than the last — his evaluation had calibrated on the first piece and was now confirming the pattern.
 
 "This is master-grade," he said. His voice was level in the way that voices are level when the speaker is exerting specific effort to keep them that way. "The crystalline structure has absorbed magical energy at the molecular level. The years of passive saturation — the ore didn't just sit near the residue, it *integrated* it. You could forge this and the resulting metal would hold inscriptions at resolutions I've never been able to achieve on commercial stock."
 
@@ -44,7 +44,7 @@ Carter's eyes sharpened. The craftsman receded; the businessman emerged. "Not th
 
 "Leon knows people."
 
-"Leon knows the *wrong* people, which in this case is the *right* people." Carter picked up one of the gift pieces again, turning it absently while he thought. "Between us, we can move it. Quiet sales. Specialty buyers who understand the material and don't need provenance documentation. Not illegal — there's no law against selling old mine ore. But the Compact would notice a sudden supply of saturated metal on the market, and noticing is what the Compact does instead of governing."
+"Leon knows the *wrong* people, which in this case is the *right* people." Carter turned one of the gift pieces in his hands, absently, while he thought. "Between us, we can move it. Quiet sales. Specialty buyers who understand the material and don't need provenance documentation. Not illegal — there's no law against selling old mine ore. But the Compact would notice a sudden supply of saturated metal on the market, and noticing is what the Compact does instead of governing."
 
 "Timeline?"
 
@@ -78,11 +78,9 @@ The numbers.
 
 I sat at the table in the shack with house plans spread to one side and a blank page in front of me, because the noise had been running the financial thread since the guild debrief and it was time to either write it down or let it spiral into the kind of background loop that prevented sleep.
 
-(*The math. Do the math. The math is the thing that makes the rest of it real.*)
-
 Floundry case, total: one hundred and fifty silvers gross, one hundred and twenty net after commission. Seventy-five from the engagement half, seventy-five from the completion half, minus the guild's twenty percent. Both collected. In the lockbox.
 
-Previous savings from Barrows and retainer accumulation: approximately twenty silvers after expenses. The retainer had been covering rent and food with a thin margin, and the Barrows net of twenty-five silvers had been partially consumed by the focusing ring and supplies.
+Previous savings from Barrows and retainer savings: approximately twenty silvers after expenses. The retainer had been covering rent and food with a thin margin, and the Barrows net of twenty-five silvers had been partially consumed by the focusing ring and supplies.
 
 Current liquid: approximately one hundred and forty silvers.
 
@@ -104,7 +102,7 @@ The gap was still there. Eleven hundred silvers between where I was and where th
 
 I looked at the house plans. Five rooms. Workshop with warding anchors. Kitchen facing east. Mere's annotations in the margins — ventilation baffles, French drains, load-bearing steel reinforcement. Revision nine, with modifications that were really revision ten but hadn't been formally redrawn yet because drawing was my job and I'd been busy breaking curses.
 
-The plan had changed. Not the house — the house was the same. Five rooms, workshop, kitchen facing east. But the plan around the house had changed, the way a building's context changes when the neighbourhood shifts. It wasn't a house for one person anymore. It hadn't been for a while.
+The plan had changed. Not the house — the house was the same. Five rooms, workshop, kitchen facing east. But the plan around the house had changed, as a building's context changes when the neighbourhood shifts. It wasn't a house for one person anymore. It hadn't been for a while.
 
 I folded the financial page and set it on top of the house plans, and the two documents sat together on the table like layers of the same working.
 
@@ -118,7 +116,7 @@ He brought a bottle of wine — the same quality as the one I'd brought him afte
 
 "You thought I'd want to stare at my own energy-budget diagrams and relive the experience of almost dying."
 
-"I thought you'd want the data." He uncorked the wine with the casual competence of a man who opened bottles the way other people opened doors. "Also, you didn't almost die. You almost passed out. There's a distinction."
+"I thought you'd want the data." He uncorked the wine the way other people opened doors — without looking, without thinking about it. "Also, you didn't almost die. You almost passed out. There's a distinction."
 
 "The distinction being?"
 
@@ -136,7 +134,7 @@ Leon set his cup down. The look he gave me said the filing had been noted and ju
 
 "Four hired men," he said. "No Compact badges, no documentation. Unmarked coin operators — the kind Cass would use to keep his hands clean." He held up fingers as he went, ticking them off like inventory. "First one through the hallway. Jonael. Single punch. The man's head hit the wall on the way down and he stayed down. Clean." A finger. "Second one behind him. Devod stood up from his stool, picked up his walking stick, broke the forearm, then the collarbone. Didn't say a word." Another finger. "Remaining two backed toward the front door. Got two steps before they realized Ledger was behind them."
 
-He paused. Picked up his wine.
+He paused. Took a drink.
 
 "Ledger opened his jacket." Leon shrugged — a minimal motion, conceding incomplete data. "Nobody's told me what was in there. Nobody's going to. Whatever it was, the two remaining hired men saw it and decided leaving was the better calculation." The corner of Leon's mouth moved — the fractional shift that, in someone else, would have been a grin. "They left fast enough to trip over each other. Devod went back to his stool and sat down like nothing had happened."
 
@@ -144,11 +142,11 @@ He paused. Picked up his wine.
 
 "A scuffle," Leon said, dry as paper.
 
-Leon took a drink. Set the cup down. Looked at me with the particular assessment of a man who understood operational cost at a personal level — who'd walked through fourteen-layer wards and sold a crystal for twelve hundred silvers and come out the other side knowing exactly what the margin between capability and catastrophe felt like.
+Leon took a drink. Set the cup down. Looked at me with the steady appraisal of a man who understood operational cost at a personal level — who'd walked through fourteen-layer wards and sold a crystal for twelve hundred silvers and come out the other side knowing exactly what the margin between capability and catastrophe felt like.
 
-"The forge-and-redirect under fire," he said. "That's not the same as the death ward. The death ward was controlled conditions. You mapped eight cycles, you timed it, you had reserves. This was sustained output under combat stress with reserves dropping through the floor and no ability to pause or recalibrate." He picked up his cup again. "The brute-force forgery hybrid — the theoretical we talked about. I think we're closer to viable than I thought."
+"The forge-and-redirect under fire," he said. "That's not the same as the death ward. The death ward was controlled conditions. You mapped eight cycles, you timed it, you had reserves. This was sustained output under combat stress with reserves dropping through the floor and no ability to pause or recalibrate." He drank. "The brute-force forgery hybrid — the theoretical we talked about. I think we're closer to viable than I thought."
 
-(*And there it is. The riffing. The ping-pong that happens when two ADD brains occupy the same room and one of them says something that catches the other's attention. Leon doesn't do sentiment. He does technique. And telling me the forging under fire was impressive is Leon's way of saying he was worried, and he's not going to say he was worried, so instead he's going to redirect into technical analysis because that's the channel we communicate through.*)
+And there it was — the riffing, the ping-pong that happened when two ADD brains occupied the same room. Leon didn't do sentiment. He did technique, and telling me the forging under fire was impressive was his way of saying he'd been worried without saying he'd been worried.
 
 "The bracelet made it possible," I said. "Without the focusing matrix, the precision drops below functional. The theory holds — volume of forged signals through multiple seams — but the individual signal quality needs to stay above a threshold. The bracelet maintains that threshold."
 
@@ -162,31 +160,31 @@ Leon took a drink. Set the cup down. Looked at me with the particular assessment
 
 "The reservoir is one variable," I said. "The other one is me. Phase 3 was conventional work. Textbook. And I nearly didn't make it — not because it was hard, but because I didn't have the reserves left for easy." I turned the cup in my hands. "I need to train. Not technique. Capacity."
 
-Leon looked at me. The assessment again — but this time with something underneath it that, in someone less disciplined about his expressions, might have been satisfaction.
+Leon looked at me. That look again — but this time with something underneath it that, in someone less disciplined about his expressions, might have been satisfaction.
 
-"Sustained output drills," he said. "Controlled depletion and recovery cycles. I've been running a version for tomb work — maintaining detection fields for hours at low intensity. Different application, same principle." He picked up his wine. "It's miserable. You'll hate it."
+"Sustained output drills," he said. "Controlled depletion and recovery cycles. I've been running a version for tomb work — maintaining detection fields for hours at low intensity. Different application, same principle." He gestured with the cup. "It's miserable. You'll hate it."
 
 "When?"
 
 "After the stone recovers. No point training capacity while your best tool is offline." He took a drink. "I'll design the protocol. You do the suffering."
 
-(*He's been thinking about this. The offer came too fast, too structured — sustained output drills, controlled depletion, recovery cycles. He'd already built the framework. He was waiting for me to arrive at the conclusion on my own, because Leon understands that telling someone they need to train is less effective than letting them run out of reserves at two percent with a dying man under their hands and a team holding the door.*)
+He'd been thinking about this. The offer came too fast, too structured — sustained output drills, controlled depletion, recovery cycles. He'd already built the framework, was waiting for me to arrive at the conclusion on my own. Leon understood that telling someone they need to train was less effective than letting them run out of reserves at two percent with a dying man under their hands and a team holding the door.
 
-"The stone's recovering." I touched the bracelet. Warm. The tired amber that was slowly deepening toward operational. "It cycles. Charge, discharge, recharge. Mere identified the conditional logic — the reservoir is autonomous. It'll be full again within the week."
+"The stone's recovering." I touched the bracelet. Warm. The tired amber that was slowly deepening toward full capacity. "It cycles. Charge, discharge, recharge. Mere identified the conditional logic — the reservoir is autonomous. It'll be full again within the week."
 
-Leon nodded. His eyes were already elsewhere — the particular distance that meant he was building something in his head, connecting the data I'd just given him to frameworks he'd been developing on his own. The riffing wasn't done. It was just moving into the phase where both parties went quiet and processed, and the results would surface next time we sat down, refined and sharper than either of us could manage alone.
+Leon nodded. His eyes were already elsewhere — the distance that meant he was building something in his head, connecting the data I'd just given him to frameworks he'd been developing on his own. The riffing wasn't done. It was just moving into the phase where both parties went quiet and processed, and the results would surface next time we sat down, refined and sharper than either of us could manage alone.
 
 We drank wine and talked about technique until the light shifted. It was the closest thing to sentiment Leon and I were capable of — shared obsession over shared wine, in a room where the diagrams of a nearly-fatal working sat next to house plans annotated by a woman neither of us mentioned, because mentioning her would have required a vocabulary we hadn't developed and weren't going to develop tonight.
 
 * * *
 
-Devod showed up the next morning with a cart.
+A cart rattled up to the shack the next morning. Devod.
 
-"For the ore," he said, standing in the doorway of the shack with the particular energy of a man who had been awake since fifth bell and had already completed three errands before arriving at a fourth. His walking stick leaned against the cart's side rail. "Carter said you'd need transport. I know a covered storage on the east dockside — bonded warehouse, my company uses it for overflow. Nobody asks questions about cargo that arrives on a delivery driver's cart."
+"For the ore," he said, standing in the doorway of the shack with the restless energy of someone who'd been awake since fifth bell and already completed three errands before arriving at a fourth. His walking stick leaned against the cart's side rail. "Carter said you'd need transport. I know a covered storage on the east dockside — bonded warehouse, my company uses it for overflow. Nobody asks questions about cargo that arrives on a delivery driver's cart."
 
-(*Because of course he does. Devod knows transport the way Carter knows metal and Leon knows tombs and Mere knows moss. The ecosystem that assembled itself around the Floundry case didn't dissolve when the case ended — the connections are infrastructure now. Devod moves cargo. That's what he does. He's been doing it for thirty years, and the difference between moving legitimate freight and moving unlabelled ore is a matter of paperwork, not principle.*)
+Because of course he did. Devod knew transport the way Carter knew metal and Leon knew tombs and Mere knew moss. The ecosystem that had assembled itself around the Floundry case hadn't dissolved when the case ended — the connections were infrastructure now.
 
-We loaded the ore — the remaining twenty-seven pieces, wrapped in cloth and packed in the canvas sacks from the mine expedition. Devod handled the cargo with the automatic competence of a man whose muscles had been trained by decades of loading and unloading, positioning each sack for weight distribution without thinking about it the way most people didn't think about breathing.
+We loaded the ore — the remaining twenty-seven pieces, wrapped in cloth and packed in the canvas sacks from the mine expedition. Devod handled the cargo with the automatic ease of decades — positioning each sack for weight distribution without thinking about it, the way breathing doesn't require thought.
 
 "Carter's already talking to buyers," Devod said as we worked. "Specialist people. The kind who build things and don't advertise where the materials come from." He paused, adjusting a sack. "I have contacts in the northern trade routes — legitimate haulers who move specialty goods for craftspeople. No Compact oversight on private cargo between guild-registered workshops. If Carter certifies the material as workshop stock, it moves on commercial transport with standard documentation."
 
@@ -196,13 +194,13 @@ We loaded the ore — the remaining twenty-seven pieces, wrapped in cloth and pa
 
 He grinned. The scattershot approach — ten ideas, nine of them ranging from impractical to actively counterproductive, and one that solved the problem with an elegance the first nine never hinted at. I was beginning to understand why Mere had said *you should listen anyway*. You didn't listen to Devod for the nine bad ideas. You listened because the tenth was worth the other nine, and you couldn't get to the tenth without sitting through the rest.
 
-"There's something else," Devod said. He'd finished loading and was leaning against the cart in the posture of a man who had more to say and was working up to saying it.
+"There's something else," Devod said. He'd finished loading and was leaning against the cart in the posture of someone working up to something.
 
 I waited.
 
 "The house." He gestured vaguely toward the shack's interior, where the plans were still spread on the table. "I know you've got plans. Mere's mentioned — well. She hasn't *mentioned*. She made a comment about ventilation design that implied she'd been reviewing architectural drawings, and the only architectural drawings she'd have access to are yours, and Mere doesn't review things casually."
 
-(*Accurate. Mere doesn't do anything casually. If she's annotating house plans, she's doing it because the house plans are a dataset she's chosen to engage with, and engaging with a dataset means she's included it in her operational framework. Devod reads his daughter the way I read magical workings — from a distance, through indirect data, with twelve years of denied access making every inference precious.*)
+Accurate. Mere didn't do anything casually — and Devod read his daughter the way I read magical workings, from a distance, through indirect data, every inference precious.
 
 "I have some thoughts," Devod said.
 
@@ -218,7 +216,7 @@ I waited.
 
 "Idea number eight. We can skip to nine if you prefer."
 
-I didn't skip. I stood by the cart in the morning light and listened to Devod Fields — Mere's father, a carriage driver, a man who'd spent twelve years watching his daughter from a distance and keeping wrapped birthday presents on a shelf — talk about foundations and drainage and reclaimed timber and, briefly and with the enthusiasm of a man who knew he was reaching, goats.
+I didn't skip. I stood by the cart in the morning light and listened to Devod Fields — Mere's father, a carriage driver, a man who'd spent twelve years watching his daughter from a distance and keeping wrapped birthday presents on a shelf — talk about foundations and drainage and reclaimed timber and, briefly and with the enthusiasm of someone who knew he was reaching, goats.
 
 Three of the ideas were useless. Two were impractical. Three were marginal. One — the pilings — was good enough that I'd already started calculating the cost difference. And one — the reclaimed timber from the Henwick demolitions — was the kind of practical, working-class knowledge that no architect would think of and no construction budget could ignore.
 
@@ -240,7 +238,7 @@ She didn't announce herself. The door opened, she walked in, set her satchel on
 
 The house plans were still on the table. My financial page sat on top of them. The tool roll Carter had made sat beside my coat. Leon's annotated diagrams were rolled up against the wall.
 
-Mere looked at the table the way she looked at all datasets — with the focused assessment of someone cataloguing inputs before forming conclusions.
+Mere looked at the table the way she looked at all datasets — cataloguing inputs before forming conclusions.
 
 "You did the math," she said.
 
@@ -276,6 +274,6 @@ Mere's finger rested on the house plans. The afternoon light came through the sh
 
 But the plans on the table were for somewhere else. And the someone wasn't alone anymore.
 
-The noise settled. Not stopped — settled. Like sediment finding the bottom.
+The noise settled. Like sediment finding the bottom.
 
 I pulled the plans closer and started sketching the relocated washbasin.