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@@ -46,7 +46,7 @@ I didn't slow down. Didn't speed up. Didn't look at him longer than the half-sec
 
 The observation clock and the Compact clock were the same clock now.
 
-Calla opened the door before we knocked. She'd been watching from the window — the curtain was still swaying. She looked thinner than five days ago, which was the kind of detail you noticed when you'd been trained to read people and wished you hadn't.
+Calla opened the door before we knocked. She'd been watching from the window — the curtain was still swaying. She looked thinner than five days ago, which was a detail I noticed and wished I hadn't.
 
 "He's worse," she said, by way of greeting. She stepped aside.
 
@@ -74,7 +74,7 @@ I kept it brief. Controlled. The temptation was there — the lattice had comple
 
 Mere wrote.
 
-"Grip tolerance — narrowing. The validation window has contracted by approximately twelve percent since Thursday. The anchor is compensating for drift by tightening its parameters."
+"Grip tolerance — narrowing. The validation window has contracted by approximately twelve percent since Thursday's observation. The anchor is compensating for drift by tightening its parameters."
 
 She wrote, and I heard the graphite pause for a fraction of a second before resuming — she was already running the concentration calculation in her head.
 
@@ -114,11 +114,11 @@ I filed that. Using children's names wasn't negotiation. It was cartography —
 
 "Tomorrow morning," I said.
 
-Ledger read my face the way I read magical lattices — with the quiet efficiency of long practice and the particular attention of someone who'd made assessment into a vocation. Whatever he found there satisfied him. He nodded once.
+Ledger read my face the way I read magical lattices — with the quiet efficiency of long practice and a focus that said assessment wasn't his job description — it was his nervous system. Whatever he found there satisfied him.
 
 "I'll be at the Floundry home by seventh bell. If the Compact sends another representative, they'll find me in the kitchen instead of Calla."
 
-He left. Professional, unhurried, economical. No wasted words, no wasted motion. Ledger trusted the chain the same way I did — because the links held weight.
+He left. Unhurried, economical. No wasted words, no wasted motion. Ledger trusted the chain the same way I did — because the links held weight.
 
 The planning room had been transformed since I'd left it that morning. Leon was already there, seated at the table with my diagrams spread before him, annotating margins with his particular brand of dense, angular handwriting that looked like architecture and read like prophecy. He'd added energy-budget overlays to each layer in a different colour of ink — blue for reservoir, red for personal reserves, green for bracelet buffer.
 
@@ -128,13 +128,13 @@ The planning room had been transformed since I'd left it that morning. Leon was
 
 "That's not the reassurance you think it is."
 
-Jonael arrived ten minutes later carrying a canvas sack that clinked with the particular sound of practical preparation. Water skins. Ceramic light rods. A medical kit that was either Carter's work or Carter-adjacent. "For tomorrow," he said, setting the sack by the wall. "Room logistics. I'll have the Floundry bedroom staged by seventh bell — light sources positioned for sustained work, water for everyone, clear floor space for equipment. Anything else?"
+Jonael arrived ten minutes later carrying a canvas sack that clinked like a field kit. Water skins. Ceramic light rods. A medical kit that was either Carter's work or Carter-adjacent. "For tomorrow," he said, setting the sack by the wall. "Room logistics. I'll have the Floundry bedroom staged by seventh bell — light sources positioned for sustained work, water for everyone, clear floor space for equipment. Anything else?"
 
 "Compact blockade," I said. "If Cass shows up —"
 
 "No one gets through the door." Jonael said it the way he said most things — flat, certain, the verbal equivalent of a locked gate. He'd met Cass exactly never, but he'd met the concept of someone who needed to be kept out of a room, and that was sufficient.
 
-Devod arrived next, slightly out of breath, carrying a paper bag from what smelled like a bakery. He'd been running errands all day — the particular Devod pattern of perpetual motion directed at whatever needed doing next. He set the bag on the table, opened it to reveal four meat pastries and a bread roll, and said, "Eat something. All of you. I don't trust any of you to have eaten today."
+Devod arrived next, slightly out of breath, carrying a paper bag from what smelled like a bakery. He'd been running errands all day — Devod's perpetual motion directed at whatever needed doing next. He set the bag on the table, opened it to reveal four meat pastries and a bread roll, and said, "Eat something. All of you. I don't trust any of you to have eaten today."
 
 He was right about at least three of us.
 
@@ -166,7 +166,7 @@ Mere didn't speak. I watched her anyway — old habit, constant habit, the cold-
 
 "The concept is this," I continued. "You don't pick the lock. You move the door frame. The lock is still locked. It's just not locked to anything anymore." I pointed to Leon's diagram of Layer 3 — the anchor, the signature bond, the recalibration mechanism. "The kill switch needs to verify Ned's signature before it fires — that's the safety mechanism. It has to know it's hitting the right person. The curse is already changing Ned, which means his signature is drifting, and the anchor keeps recalibrating to track him. It's fast enough to keep up. What the moss does — at the altered concentration — is suppress the resonance between the anchor and the signature. It doesn't hurt Ned. It doesn't speed up the curse. It blinds the anchor. The tracker loses the signal it's following, over-corrects, loses it again. Each correction widens the gap until the anchor can't verify the target at all." I let that settle. "The kill trigger fires. Finds nothing it recognises. Dissipates harmlessly. Layer 3 neutralised without ever touching it directly."
 
-Leon nodded. He'd been there when the concept clicked in this same room, two days ago. His nod carried the weight of someone who understood not just the theory but the elegance of it — a man who cracked wards for a living recognising lateral thinking at its finest.
+Leon nodded. He'd been there when the concept clicked in this same room, two days ago. His nod carried the weight of someone who understood not just the theory but the elegance — a ward-cracker recognising lateral thinking at its finest.
 
 "Layer 2," I said, moving on because the moment needed to breathe and the best way to let it breathe was to stop holding it. "The stabiliser. It monitors the degradation curse and repairs damage — any conventional dissolution approach gets patched faster than it can do harm. The brute-force method would give it four hundred things to fix, and it would fix all four hundred. So we don't fight it. We weaponise it."
 
@@ -202,11 +202,11 @@ The team dispersed into their separate evenings. Leon heading home to his rooms
 
 Mere walked with me.
 
-We took the long way through the guild quarter and down toward the docks, not because the long way was scenic but because neither of us suggested the short way and the silence that filled the gap was comfortable enough to keep walking in. She carried the resonance notes and preparation calculations in her satchel. I carried the diagrams and a tiredness that had settled into my bones with the particular weight of something that wasn't going to leave until the job was done.
+We took the long way through the guild quarter and down toward the docks, because neither of us suggested the short way and the silence that filled the gap was comfortable enough to keep walking in. She carried the resonance notes and preparation calculations in her satchel. I carried the diagrams and a tiredness that had settled into my bones and wasn't leaving until the job did.
 
-The dockside at dusk smelled like river water and fish residue and the particular mineral tang of the old mill, which had been running since before I was born and would be running after I was dead. My shack resolved out of the evening light the way it always did — small, square, stubbornly present on its quarter-acre between the river and the mill road.
+The dockside at dusk smelled like river water and fish residue and the mineral tang of the old mill, which had been running since before I was born and would be running after I was dead. My shack resolved out of the evening light the way it always did — small, square, stubbornly present on its quarter-acre between the river and the mill road.
 
-I hadn't planned this. I hadn't planned for anyone to be walking beside me when I arrived at the place where I slept, which was different from the place where I lived, which was a distinction that existed only in the drawings pinned to the wall inside. In four weeks of guild work and five weeks of Mere, no one had been inside the shack except me and occasionally Ledger, and Ledger had the professional discretion to assess the space and say nothing about it.
+I hadn't planned this. I hadn't planned for anyone to be walking beside me when I arrived at the place where I slept, which was different from the place where I lived, which was a distinction that existed only in the drawings pinned to the wall inside. In four weeks of guild work and five weeks of Mere, no one had been inside the shack except me and occasionally Ledger, and Ledger had the discretion to assess the space and say nothing about it.
 
 I opened the door.
 
@@ -228,7 +228,7 @@ Her hand came up. Not touching — hovering, the way she hovered over a bookshel
 
 "The load-bearing wall between the workshop and the main room — is that structural or can it be relocated if the workshop dimensions change?"
 
-I stared at her. This was not the reaction I had predicted. I had run the scenario — her entering the shack, seeing the poverty, the spartan functionality, the confession of a man who invested nothing in his present because his present was a holding pattern for a future he couldn't afford. I'd predicted embarrassment. Possibly pity. Possibly the particular silence that came when someone recalculated you downward.
+I stared at her. This was not the reaction I had predicted. I had run the scenario — her entering the shack, seeing the poverty, the spartan functionality, the confession of someone who invested nothing in his present because his present was a holding pattern for a future he couldn't afford. I'd predicted embarrassment. Possibly pity. Possibly the particular silence that came when someone recalculated you downward.
 
 "Structural," I said, because she'd asked a question and the question had an answer. "The foundation anchors for the warding system run through it. Moving it would mean re-routing the entire warding infrastructure."