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@@ -4,7 +4,7 @@ The brief had been on the table for fourteen hours when the second knock came.
 
 This one was an actual knock — three measured raps at seventh bell Thursday morning. I knew who it was before I opened the door, because guild couriers slid papers and left, creditors pounded, and Mere didn't knock. That left one category of visitor: someone from the guild who wanted to see my face when they talked to me.
 
-Ledger stood on my doorstep looking exactly as contained as he had behind the desk at 14 Greystone Lane. Gray hair, lean build, arms at his sides instead of crossed — which meant he was making an effort to appear casual, which meant this wasn't casual. He wore a dark coat that looked unremarkable in the way that expensive things looked unremarkable when the wearer had taste.
+Ledger stood on my doorstep looking exactly as contained as he had behind the desk at 14 Greystone Lane. Grey hair, lean build, arms at his sides instead of crossed — making an effort to appear casual, which meant this wasn't. He wore a dark coat that looked unremarkable in the way that expensive things looked unremarkable when the wearer had taste.
 
 "Varrant." He glanced past me into the shack with the same clinical efficiency he'd used to read my physical condition after the Barrows. I watched him catalogue the space in under two seconds: one room, one cot, house plans on the wall, table with the case brief still unfolded on it. "You've read it."
 
@@ -64,7 +64,7 @@ The Floundry home was in the upper guild quarter — not the hill district where
 
 (*Eight rooms at least. Three floors. The study makes nine if it's separate from the main house. Warding anchors — five-point installation, that's three hundred silvers minimum, plus the annual upkeep contract. Total property value, with the location and the garden and the custom glazing and the decorative stonework — the noise is running the estimate before I can stop it. More than my house plans. Significantly more. My plans have five rooms and a workshop. This house has five rooms just on the upper floors. The front room alone is larger than the shack twice over. The furniture visible through the window costs more than everything I own. This is what twenty years of steady, well-paid work looks like when you build it into something permanent. This is what I'm saving for. This is what losing the breadwinner would destroy.*)
 
-I rang the bell. A boy answered — ten, maybe eleven, with his a square jaw and the careful posture of a child who'd learned recently that adults didn't always have answers. He looked at me, assessed me with the solemn precision of someone too young to be this serious, and said, "Are you another healer?"
+I rang the bell. A boy answered — ten, maybe eleven, with a square jaw and the careful posture of a child who'd learned recently that adults didn't always have answers. He looked at me, assessed me with the solemn precision of someone too young to be this serious, and said, "Are you another healer?"
 
 "Not exactly."
 
@@ -96,7 +96,7 @@ She paused. "You know the timeline already."
 
 "I know the timeline doesn't make sense. Standard Compact assessment runs four to six weeks for complex workings. Eleven days suggests either exceptional efficiency or a predetermined conclusion."
 
-The silence that followed was the particular silence of someone hearing their own suspicion spoken aloud for the first time by someone else. Calla Floundry's jaw tightened — not surprise, confirmation. She'd noticed the timeline too. She'd been too focused on saving her husband to chase it.
+The silence that followed was the loaded silence of someone hearing their own suspicion spoken aloud for the first time by someone else. Calla Floundry's jaw tightened — not surprise, confirmation. She'd noticed the timeline too. She'd been too focused on saving her husband to chase it.
 
 "The reports," I said. I had both of them open on the table now — Practitioner Vellen's assessment from week three, Practitioner Dorath's from week five. Both registered curse-breakers, both Guild of Arcane Practice members, both operating within Compact-sanctioned methodology. Their analyses were thorough. Their runic notation was clean and properly documented. Their conclusions were consistent: a degradation curse, aggressively anchored, with reinforcement structures that resisted standard dissolution approaches.
 
@@ -120,7 +120,7 @@ Another silence. Calla's hands were flat on the table — the posture of someone
 
 "I'm not a curse-breaker."
 
-She studied me for a long moment. Whatever she found apparently passed inspection, because she straightened and began speaking with the same organized precision she'd applied to the documents. Ned had been anxious in the weeks before — coming home with questions he wouldn't fully explain. His routine shifted: later hours, meetings she wasn't included in, a tension in his shoulders that she'd learned to read over twenty years of marriage. He'd always been steady. The steadiness cracked, and she'd noticed, and he'd told her not to worry.
+She studied me for a long moment. She must have decided I'd earned the honesty, because she straightened and began speaking with the same organized precision she'd applied to the documents. Ned had been anxious in the weeks before — coming home with questions he wouldn't fully explain. His routine shifted: later hours, meetings she wasn't included in, a tension in his shoulders that she'd learned to read over twenty years of marriage. He'd always been steady. The steadiness cracked, and she'd noticed, and he'd told her not to worry.
 
 Then the curse hit, and she understood that *don't worry* had been *I'm in too deep and I don't know how to tell you*.
 
@@ -184,11 +184,11 @@ Thresholds' doorbell chimed its assessment as I pushed through the front entranc
 
 Mere was reshelving in the theory section — pre-Compact texts, based on the spine markings. She didn't look up when I came in, but her hands paused for exactly one beat before resuming.
 
-"What happened?" she asked. Direct, no preamble. She'd heard something in my footsteps — pace, weight, the particular rhythm of someone carrying a problem through a door.
+"What happened?" she asked. Direct, no preamble. She'd heard something in my footsteps — pace, weight, the rhythm of someone carrying a problem through a door.
 
 "New case. It's bad."
 
-She finished the shelf before turning. Her eyes — blue, constantly scanning, cataloguing — swept me once. Whatever she found was apparently consistent with that assessment, because she nodded and moved to the counter.
+She finished the shelf before turning. Her eyes — blue, constantly scanning, cataloguing — swept me once. The assessment held, because she nodded and moved to the counter.
 
 "The case relates to the Floundry family," I said. "Curse classified as unbreakable. Two curse-breakers failed. Man is dying — mute, deaf, organs beginning to fail. He tries to write, but whatever comes out isn't language anyone can read. The curse took his voice, took his hearing, and now it's taking the last workaround he had. It was designed to silence him after he filed reports on Compact supply chain irregularities."
 
@@ -298,12 +298,10 @@ I picked up one of the blank scraps from his notebook and wrote in clear, block
 
 I held it where he could read it. His eyes moved across the words. His jaw worked — the ghost of a response his voice couldn't deliver.
 
-Then I set the paper on his blanket, nodded to Calla at the doorway, and walked downstairs. The boy was in the hallway, standing against the wall with the practiced stillness of a child who'd learned to be invisible when strangers came and went. He watched me pass. I didn't offer him reassurance — I don't do that, and children who've had their world broken can smell false comfort the way Sniff could smell fear. But I met his eyes, and whatever he saw there was apparently enough, because he nodded once and went back to the stairs where his sister was waiting.
+Then I set the paper on his blanket, nodded to Calla at the doorway, and walked downstairs. The boy was in the hallway, standing against the wall with the practiced stillness of a child who'd learned to be invisible when strangers came and went. He watched me pass. I didn't offer him reassurance — I don't do that, and children who've had their world broken can smell false comfort the way Sniff could smell fear. But I met his eyes, and something in my expression landed, because he nodded once and went back to the stairs where his sister was waiting.
 
 The noise was running at a speed I hadn't felt since the death ward. Not the manic cycling of the Barrows — that had been puzzle-excitement, the thrill of a system yielding its secrets under sustained analysis. This was different. This was the recognition that someone with resources, patience, and intelligence had built a machine designed to kill a man slowly while making the killing look like something simpler than it was. And that the same machine was designed to defeat every standard approach to stopping it.
 
 The curse wasn't unbreakable. It was *engineered to appear unbreakable*. And whoever had engineered it understood the system well enough to build their architecture inside the system's blind spots.
 
-I had four to six weeks. Probably less. The paper scraps on Ned's bedside table said the deterioration was accelerating.
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-The noise didn't settle on the walk home. It wasn't going to settle for a while.
+Three layers. Three locks. And somewhere behind them, a man with clear eyes and a jaw that used to be square, watching strangers walk through his room and unable to ask a single one of them if he was going to live.